Would somebody please rate my essay Do the benefits of technology outweigh the risks?

On a scale of 1-10 currently 4. Clearly that isn't the whole of the essay (unless it is an answer to a test question) and as an opening paragraph it does not state what the essay is about. First sentence seems like a run on sentence and should be shortened. It is unclear to me which subject the essay will be about. Is it the adaptation of humans to our technology? Our adapting to the changing state of our technology? Or is it about our choosing convenience over responsibility and environmental stewardship?